Find the mistakes in IELTS Task 2 Essays🔍

Scientists have done a lot of researches research into the causes of addiction, however, it is difficult to pinpoint one specific cause.

Although obesity is a problem, I do not believe fast food should be limited or banned.

Remember the comma after the dependent clause starting with 'Although'.

In my opinion, constructing more parks in city centres are is the answer to this problem.

Gerunds and gerund phrases are always singular.
This is a really common mistake in IELTS writing.

There are many advantages and disadvantages to social media, and ,in this essay I will discuss both points of view and give my opinion.,

The grammar is fine.
However it would be much better to say what those advantages are in general, and then directly give your opinion.

For example:
Although social media has several disadvantages, such as time-wasting and annoying advertisements, I believe sharing photos and keeping in touch with friends outweigh any negative aspects.

✅ Directly answers the question
✅ No memorised/obvious phrases = the best practice for a higher band.

To improve the well-being of the elderlies, governments need to increase the amount of money allocated to pensions.

✅Elderly people, or

✅The elderly (as a group)

This is a very common mistake!

❌With regards to fossil fuels and unsustainable energy, I believe _______

✅ With regard to fossil fuels and unstatinable energy, I believe _______

✅ With regard to ___

✅ In regard to____

❌ With regards to ____

❌ In regards to ____

"Elderly people like to live in retirement homes and enjoy their life."

Is that really true for all elderly people?    No...

Be careful not to generalise!

✅Elderly people usually like to ____

✅Elderly people generally like to ____

✅Elderly people often like to ____

✅Some elderly people like to ____

A large amount of businesses

If we use 'A large amount' the noun has to be uncountable.

✅ A large number of businesses have ____

We cannot use contractions in academic writing. The only exception is the general task 1 writing task (an informal letter).

I believe there are several benefits of giving children offspring a private education.

This is an inaccurate synonym. Offspring is used more in a biological sense particularly for animals.

Juveniles or a child would be an accurate synonym for children.

Employing extra doctors, who are already annoyed as they work very long hours, is not enough to solve this problem.

Here there is another gerund phrase, so the verb has to be singular. 

No
If the question asks you for the advantages and disadvantages just present them like you are observing, but with no opinion.

However if the question says:
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Do the advantages outweigh
the disadvantages?
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You have to make a choice, and you definitely need to state your opinion.

Politics in many countries make makes it difficult for people to start a business.

Some nouns don't have a singular form:
Maths / Politics / Economics / Physics / Mumps / Measles
(some subjects and diseases)

They look plural but need a singular verb:

"Physics is interesting"

Before buying a house, investors should take a lot of advices advice from professionals and financial advisors.

Advice is uncountable

The economical economic situation in the world seems to be getting worse.

The adjective 'economic' relates to the economy. Economical is also an adjective, but means inexpensive or cheaper. For example: 

"It is more economical to drive a diesel car rather than a petrol car".

In big cities the houses are getting more expensive, and, as a result, young people are finding it difficult to buy their first home.

With plural nouns do not use 'the' when you write about things in general.

These days, many people are preferring prefer to invest their money in a stable way.

Prefer is a stative verb (it does not take the continous tense)

Provided that employees remain motivated, I believe working remotely is beneficial for workers and employers.

"Provided that" is a nice alternative to "if". The clause functions in the same way, and therefore needs a comma.